Saturday, November 21, 2015

second shitty rough draft. Ugh.

Okay, so here goes... Second shitty rough draft. And I really don't think it is any better than the first one. My computer has been acting up, and therefore put me in a foul mood, leading to crappy writing with many holes in it. I have made it rain all through the text...$$



Writing is regarded by many as a tranquil activity, something that calm people do when they want to write poems, books, or papers for their education. What many seems to forget is that writing is the key element behind most of the major changes in modern society. Without writing the world wouldn’t have had Martin Luther King Jr.’s speeches, it wouldn’t have had the Arab Spring, it wouldn’t have had the elected leaders around the world. Writing is a powerful weapon many overlook in today’s struggle for justice, even though it is right under their noses. Documentary filmmaking is one of these forums where writing shows its true form as a carving tool to shape the ideas that can bring changes in the world.
Thea Mercouffer was born and raised in Romania but escaped to the United States with her family from the communist dictatorship in 1987 (Thea). Mercouffer moved to Los Angeles and there continued pursuing her great passion in life: Acting and Directing. Meanwhile, she was on the board of a big organization and when they asked her if she could write and direct a series of films about sexual assault she “fell into” documentary filmmaking (Interview). Mercouffer took on the challenge to direct the film, going straight from only having directed theater (Interview). She then continued on making a film about human trafficking, and Mercouffer found that she “really enjoyed making documentary films so [she] stuck with it”. That was 13 years ago. Today, Thea Mercouffer is a  renowned documentary filmmaker with a kind heart and a warm spirit.
Mercouffer is one of those who use writing to change the world she lives in, And she does so through her documentary films. Her latest project clearly shows how using words to one’s advantage truly can make a difference. It all started when she realized that the Los Angeles River going through her home city was not deemed navigable, and therefore not under the protection of the Clean Water Act. Mercouffer’s husband George Wolfe decided to travel 51 miles and show the EPA that the river is, truly, navigable (Press release). Mercouffer decided to document this act of civil disobedience, and that created the foundation for her award-winning documentary Rock the Boat. The issue with documentaries however, is that in order to be able to create them one needs money. This is where the building blocks of writing used to support world-changing ideas come into play. Mercouffer had to convince sponsors that her documentary was worth their time and effort through a documentary treatment, which she found extremely challenging since a treatment sets the tone and style for the whole film (interview). She had to be able to write in a way that would make the reader understand the importance of the completion of her project, and as written in So What? Who Cares? “…writers who fail to show that others should care or already do care about their claims will ultimately lose their audiences’ interest” (Graff, 2010), Mercouffers whole film depended on her being able to write in the right way for her audience.
Thea Mercouffer also had to apply for sponsorships, and she tells the story of how one has to be endearing when needed, as well as strict and formal in other settings (interview). In a the opening sentence of a sponsorship letter sent by Mercouffer’s producer for Rock the Boat, one can understand the fine line that needs to be balanced in order to successfully receive support.
“Dear Rob,

Our mutual friend, John McLaughlin, suggested I write to you directly about Rock the Boat – the documentary about the Los Angeles River, which I’m producing. We’re raising the final finishing funds, a bit less than $30,000. John and Susan have contributed and think that, given your interest in the river and environmental activism, you might like to participate, too.” (Sponsorship)

            What Randi Johnson, producer of Rock the Boat, shows here is that an application for funding does not need to be extremely formal, even though he does not know the person he is asking for support. Mercouffer does explain, however, that it is when one applies for grants it is extremely important to follow the guidelines given, and that it can sometimes be an very tiring thing to write the applications, since they are quite intricate and often fruitless attempts (interview).  
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            Another crucial part of making a documentary film is the legal documents that need to be in order. When conducting an interview one needs their consent to use the footage captured during the interview, and forgetting to get their signature on those papers can make or break a documentary before it has even started to come together. $$$$$$ GET EXAMPLE OF LEGAL DOCUMENT WRITING HERE $$$$$$$$$$$. One also needs to get proper paper work filled out in order to receive the permission to film in certain areas, and in that can sometimes cause issues when they have not been meticulously filled out in the correct way. An example of this kind of writing is a Crowd Release, which is a legal disclaimer for a location where people may show up in the frame
“By entering and by your presence here, you consent to be photographed, filmed and/or otherwise recorded. Your entry constitutes your consent to such photography, filming and/or recording and to any use, in any and all media throughout the universe in perpetuity, of your appearance, voice and name for any purpose whatsoever in connection with the production presently entitled: _______________________.
You understand that all photography, filming and/or recording will be done in reliance on this consent given by you by entering this area.
If you do not agree to the foregoing, please do not enter this area.” (Crowd Release, 2009).
The same goes for the use of music and other copyrighted material such as logos or brand names. When making a documentary film it is crucial to be able to understand and write in legal terms in order to not get confused in a world filled with jargon. $$$$$ INTRODUCE QUOTE $$$$$$$$$$$ “Jargon is the terminology used by those in a particular profession or group to facilitate clear and precise communication.” (Boyd, 2011).
            Even though a massive part of the creation of a documentary revolves around disclaimers and asking for money, the creative process is also highly depending on writing. Documentaries may not seem dramatic in the same way a play or a regular movie, but the creator still has to make sure that the storytelling is unique, and that the film has an arch that it follows. Mercouffer says that since she had written many scripts for theater before she got involved in documentary filmmaking she knew what she was doing, but that the factual foundation had to be more extensive. $$$$$$$$$ FIND GOOD MATERIAL IN INTERVIEW $$$$$$$$$$. While writing a script a storyline is created and the film begins to form a skeleton one could say. It is around this skeleton the rest of the documentary will come together, even though the main storyline may change during the creative process. When the base for the documentary has been filmed, the skeleton will work so that one can easily see what pieces are missing for it to become a whole body. ß DON’T LIKE THIS, REWORD REWORD REWORD (OR DELETE)……
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 NEED TO FORMAT SOURCES PROPERLY
           

http://www.jdsupra.com/legalnews/crowd-release-44788/
Interview with Thea Mercouffer
Sponsorship Proposal
Press Release
http://www.theamercouffer.com/
Graff, G., & Birkenstein, C. (2010). "So What? Who Cares? In They say / I say: The moves that matter in academic writing (2nd ed., p. 93). New York: W.W. Norton &.

Boyd, J. (2011). Murder! (Rhetorically Speaking). In Writing spaces: Readings on writing. (Vol. 1, p. 89). Anderson, South Carolina.: Parlor Press.

3 comments:

  1. Looks like you have made it pretty far with your rough draft! We are somewhat on the same level thus far, and I have pushed myself just to reach those 4,5, and 6 pages as soon as possible. Just to start the process of revising, add, and polish our final draft! With other papers to write, I think its great that you have really given yourself time to write this rough draft! A tip, if you recorded the interview, like I did, I sat down and typed out all the suitable quotes my interviewee said, just to see if they would fit in a specific paragraph later on! Good luck bud!

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  2. I really like the way how your wrote your paper and I enjoyed more reading the paper I like how you used the information you got from your interview, artifact and how you fit all them in the right sentences. But I think you and I we have the same problem its we include to much information and look to me its we samurais our interview and artifact and I think we need to analyze more about what did we understand about what we wrote. Im not trying to say we have bad paper but im tying to make it better.

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  3. Marta, you shouldn't be so hard on yourself. I along with the rest of the class are have several difficulties, but we're all on the right track. From reading your rough draft, it seems like you know what you want out of this paper and how you're going to get there. I really liked how you introduced your paper with the things that wouldn't have happened if it wasn't for writing. Another thing that I found very interesting was how Mercouffer escaped Romania and came to the United States. You incorporated the citations very neatly and organized, and you backed them up with great summarizations. I hope your final draft is coming along just great.

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